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14/03/2017 18:58:13

roroduck
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I'm working toward a more dialogue-driven style.

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14/03/2017 23:59:20

PatMarrNCMuvizu mogul
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14 minutes! Man, that takes some dedication! Interesting story so far, but a little hard to follow , given your non-chronological approach and gradual revelation of key information. Good use of existing sets, and I like your use of the cat!

Looking forward to seeing the rest of the story!
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15/03/2017 02:33:45

drewiMuvizu mogulExperimental user
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In Love@martha
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15/03/2017 03:13:00

roroduck
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PatMarrNC wrote:
14 minutes! Man, that takes some dedication! Interesting story so far, but a little hard to follow , given your non-chronological approach and gradual revelation of key information. Good use of existing sets, and I like your use of the cat!

Looking forward to seeing the rest of the story!
Thank you for the encouragement! I expect Chapter Two will flow better as I learn more about this format. I'm glad I was able to keep Max as a higher profile character in the story thanks to your Animal Pack.
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15/03/2017 12:47:57

roroduck
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drewi wrote:
In Love@martha

aaahhh I'll tell her!!
edited by roroduck on 15/03/2017
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